Tuesday, 17 May 2016

Joshua - Jenny and the faeries

One day dare was a girl named jenny and she was hiding from her friends and she found a door  that looked like a cave and she found a key and she unlocked the door and she saw a world full of faeries
And hided and she saw a cassell and she saw a red faerie and jenny ran and there was lots and lots of faeries
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Hi Joshua, what an interesting story! I like how you have used some powerful words like "she saw a world full of faeries". Have you double checked that you have full stops and capital letters in the right places?
Miss Ashley

1 comment:

  1. Hi
    This look like you have fun writing a story. This story is good to read. Keep up good work.

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