Your stories are getting better everyday Denzel!
You have tried to use some powerful words like the sun was shining, the rabbits were jumping around! Great!
We need to work on your spelling so that your ideas are very clear when you read.
Denzel @ Tamaki Primary: the girl was woking in the forest the sun sining o...: the girl was woking in the forest the sun sining on her she sore rabets japing aroud her rhey ran becoos a fox cam she ran and ran in to the...