Wednesday, 21 September 2016

Wesley @ Tamaki Primary School: the lost bried

I like your solution, very clear. It shows you really thought about the situation. You are absolutely right! If the bride was running into the muddy forrest she would of left footprints in the mud, and the husband would have been able to find her. Great thinking! 

Next steps - Adding detail. you have just said 'the girl was getting married'. Who was the girl? What did she look like? What was she wearing? Where was she getting married? Who was she marrying? Did she love him? 

Give more detail to your characters and setting before you move onto your problem and solution.

Wesley @ Tamaki Primary School: the lost bried: one day it was a glorious morning. With a girl that was getting married the girl dilts ten want to get married because she was aimlessly. Th...

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