"Isaia you have been trying to hard to improve your writing and it really shows here! You have used dialogue, capital letters and full stops, tried to use a paragraph space and you have lots of powerful words. Well done!
Next time when you type up your story, please make sure to leave spaces between your full stop and your next word.
Isaia @ Tamaki Primary School: walking to school.: One glorious morning a family That Lived by a bridge. The bridge is huge and humongous Also it's the biggest bridge in the world....