Monday, 9 May 2016

Hiria - At morning tea

At morning tea me and my best friend hope.t we were playing tag it was great we were having fun playing tag it was amazing then she tag me then  i had   to run after her around the big play ground i go very tired then we had a long break to rest after we got back to our favourite game it was got super good. Then the bell rang after me and hope.t rushed to class fast.

Hi Hiria, I like how you have added powerful words to your story like amazing, a long break, bug play ground, very tired. rushed to class. It makes your story more interesting.Miss Ashley

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