Once upon a tale an old man and his son went fishing and caught the biggest fish ever. It pulled them into the water.
They couldn't breathe. Sharks circled around them getting ready to attack. Suddenly an octopus's tentacles rushed through the water and grabbed them. Their eyes were gloomy with fear. Then a helicopter rose from out of the distance.
The octopus swam away leaving the old man and his son in the water. The helicopter saw them. The sharks swam away.
The helicopter picked them up and took them back to shore, where they went back home.
by Sione
We are Year 3 and 4 students at Tamaki Primary School, a Manaiakalani school in Auckland and our teachers are Miss Ashley and Mrs Sharma.
I liked the way your plot thickened as your story progressed, Sione. I especially like it when the octopus used his tentacles to add drama to the plot.
ReplyDeleteSione, I enjoyed reading your story. you really painted a picture with your words.....I could see everything!
ReplyDeleteFrom Mrs Fepuleai
wow what a story keep up the good work Sione
ReplyDeleteKeziah
Boy- they were unlucky to have ALL of those creatures trying to get them! Thank goodness for the helicopter! Keep writing great stories, Sione!
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