Saia @ Tamaki Primary School: The wedding.

You have started off well using powerful words and details - 'one glorious day the sun was rising and it was beautiful'. Great! You have tried to add dialogue and use speech marks (I can help you put these in the right place)



Saia @ Tamaki Primary School: The wedding.: One glorious day the sun was rising  it was beautiful.  There was a lady who was beautiful she was ging to a wedding. when the wedding was s...

Maria @ Tamaki Primary School: MY story about a lady.

Maria, you have some good ideas in your stories. You have a problem and a solution. I also love that you have used those classic fairytale beginning and ending - 'once upon a time' and 'they lived happily ever after'.
You have added some details like her heels fell in the mud then she got more angry, mud was splashing on her, she heard the birds tweeting. That is awesome!

Next steps - paragraphs, and using full stops and capital letters in the right place. It helps structure and organise your ideas so it makes more sense when you read it.



Maria @ Tamaki Primary School: MY story about a lady.: once  upon a time there was a lady called ana she  was so pretty she was getting ready for her wedding then sh then she got more she was wal...

Cordez @ Tamaki Primary School: tps year 4

I love your ending - what a good solution for when you are scared!

Cordez, whats happening with your capital letters and full stops.. I'm sure its not like this in your book.
Next time, come and sit with me and we can type it up together to check that it is alright. 

"One day it was a glorious day and the give was spitting and she got away and when she got away she ran fast as she could and then she stopped she walked the rest of the way when she came up to a big house. it was so big! Like, so big that I could sleep in there. The sun was rising. I was so tired and I came back and they saw me in their bed. I ran back home and got my passport and I got a flight to Alaska".



Cordez @ Tamaki Primary School: tps year 4: One day it was a glorious day and the. Give was spitting and  she  got away and. When she got  away she  run fast as she. Code and th...

Syraiah-Lee @ Tamaki Primary School: A beautiful wedding.

Your writing just keeps getting better and better Syraiah-Lee.
You have got paragraphs, dialogue, powerful words, most of the time you have used full stops and capital letters properly and you have lots of detail. Woohoo!

I love this part "It got darker and darker. She got scared, as the sun went down and the moon came up". What an interesting way to say that! You could have said like 'she stayed there for ages and then it was night time' but thats so boring. I love the way you are thinking to make everything you say very interesting. 

Next steps - sometimes you remembered to put a capital letter on Daniel and Rosey's names and sometimes you didn't. Just make sure you double check it when you are typing! :)



Syraiah-Lee @ Tamaki Primary School: A beautiful wedding.: It was a beautiful day and a lady named rosey was going to get married with a man named daniel. They went in a limo to go to the woods but ...

Denzel @ Tamaki Primary: the girl was woking in the forest the sun sining o...

Your stories are getting better everyday Denzel! 
You have tried to use some powerful words like the sun was shining, the rabbits were jumping around! Great! 
We need to work on your spelling so that your ideas are very clear when you read.



Denzel @ Tamaki Primary: the girl was woking in the forest the sun sining o...: the girl was woking in the forest the sun sining on her she sore rabets japing aroud her rhey ran becoos a fox cam she ran and ran in to the...

Hope L @ Tamaki Primary School: a scary spooky forest

"HELP, HELP, I'M GETTING CHASED BY SOME WOLVES"
This part is the first part I looked at when I came to your blog. What a great way to get your reader hooked into your story!

You just keep getting better - using dialogue and speech marks, adding detail and powerful words!

Next steps - where are your paragraphs? (I'm sure you had these in your book, remember them to type them in)



Hope L @ Tamaki Primary School: a scary spooky forest:  once there was a man in the forest and his name was jack and he was there by himself and on the other side of the forest there was another ...

Lopiseni @ Tamaki Primary School: honey moon

Great story Lopiseni! You have got a clear problem and solution. I love that you have included some dialogue, you have got two - one time she says "I've got to catch my breathe" and the other one she thought to herself "I should go and marry him". Great!

Next steps - add more detail and description about your character. Who was she? Does she have a name? Where was the honeymoon? Why did she lie and run away (Did she not love the man?)? What does she look like? What is she wearing? 
Next steps - come and see me about your speech marks and I'll help you put them in the right place

Keep it up Lopi!



Lopiseni @ Tamaki Primary School: honey moon: the lady went on a honeymoon and she said i got to catch my breathe and so she layered and ran a away in the forest and she got lost she wa...

Hope L @ Tamaki Primary School: a wedding day

Aw, what a fairytale ending - and they lived happily ever after!
Yus! You have got a simile, you have got dialogue, you have added detail and some powerful words. Awesome! 
Next steps - where are your paragraphs? (I'm sure you did this in your book! Make sure you type these in!)



Hope L @ Tamaki Primary School: a wedding day:  Once there was a lady who was getting married so she put on ha dress  as soft as a marshmallow then she  put on her shoes but her husband ...

Wesley @ Tamaki Primary School: the lost bried

I like your solution, very clear. It shows you really thought about the situation. You are absolutely right! If the bride was running into the muddy forrest she would of left footprints in the mud, and the husband would have been able to find her. Great thinking! 

Next steps - Adding detail. you have just said 'the girl was getting married'. Who was the girl? What did she look like? What was she wearing? Where was she getting married? Who was she marrying? Did she love him? 

Give more detail to your characters and setting before you move onto your problem and solution.



Wesley @ Tamaki Primary School: the lost bried: one day it was a glorious morning. With a girl that was getting married the girl dilts ten want to get married because she was aimlessly. Th...

Hiria @ Tamaki Primary School: The hearing clinic

You have worked very hard to get this finished so quickly Hiria - great to see!
Slide 2 - what a good connection - your friend and classmate Kordell wears hearing aids as well... and, his are blue just like Leevarde!
Slide 6 - the question says what sound can't he hear.. check the story again. It tells you specific sounds (for example "th") that Leevarde can't hear.



Hiria @ Tamaki Primary School: The hearing clinic: we were learning about  a boy called leevarde he had hearing aids we were talking about what hearing aids need and what they do it was so co...

Auckland @ Tamaki Primary School: Week 9 reading

A great summary on slide 3 Auckland. You have shown that you know how to find the main idea in a text which was one of your goals for this term, well done.



Auckland @ Tamaki Primary School: Week 9 reading: WALT understanding what I read

Auckland @ Tamaki Primary School: Week 9 reading

A great summary on slide 3 Auckland. You have shown that you know how to find the main idea in a text which was one of your goals for this term, well done.



Auckland @ Tamaki Primary School: Week 9 reading: WALT understanding what I read

Syraiah-Lee @ Tamaki Primary School: week 9 reading.

Add more detail to this answer Syraiah-Lee. Who do you know who has hearing aids? Whats their name? Do they go to school with you?

Slide 6 - in the story it says specific sounds that Leevarde can't hear. Go back to the story and double check this..

Slide 9 - a very comprehensive answer! You have said lots of things about her, well done.

Slides 10, 11, 12, 13, 14. - AMAZING answers! These answers show you went back to the story and re-read it again to make sure you really understood it. Well done!



Syraiah-Lee @ Tamaki Primary School: week 9 reading.

Hiria @ Tamaki Primary School: The forest

What an amazing story Hiria - you remember to use powerful words, paragraphs, dialogue, full stops and other punctuation (!!) and capital letters in the right place. 5 out of 5! 
Next steps - in this story you have used the word "said" three times. 
Said Jack
Said Jack
Said Jack
For your next story, try and think of some other ways he could of said it. 
Maybe 
Yelled Jack
Screamed Jack
Whispered Jack
Mumbled Jack
This will help show the feelings of your character. 
Great story, so proud of you!



Hiria @ Tamaki Primary School: The forest: "wow what a scary dark blue night' said Jack strolling through the blue dark forest.Jack was singing by his mouth and being proud o...

Auckland @ Tamaki Primary School: The 10 cobras

You have used dialogue so well in this story Auckland! lady said "C-C-COBRAS!!". This really shows how she felt and how scared she was to see the scary cobras. Great job!





Auckland @ Tamaki Primary School: The 10 cobras: 1 Bailey there was a man and a lady .Who were the only people on Earth.C walk into a Spooky Forest I heard he trees and the sky was dark and...

Joshua N @ Tamaki Primary School: the invisible man

OH MY GOODNESS THIS IS SO SCARY! 
I love how you have used lots of interesting and powerful words like guillotine and invisible. They make your story seem real!
Next steps - describe your character more in detail. You maybe could explain what his name was, why he lived in the forrest, why he liked killing people, etc.





Joshua N @ Tamaki Primary School: the invisible man: in the forest there lived a invisible man that had a secret lair  a secret button on one tree that had a password. some people say that the ...

Lopiseni @ Tamaki Primary School: zombies

Lopi, I know you wrote them in your book - where are your full stops and punctuation? 
I LOVE the problem you have put into this story - actually, there are lots of little problem! When I read it makes me think 'oh whats going to happen' and I feel excited to keep reading. Well done Lopi! Your writing has improved sooo much in the past few weeks!



Lopiseni @ Tamaki Primary School: zombies: jack was going through the wood these zombies came for jack was the only one lifted so the zombies found jack and jack ran to the other s...

Stanley T @ Tamaki Primary School: The house

I LOVE this sentence- "Why Is a house in the woods?” he said in a confused voice. It shows how your character is feeling at this point in time. Keep it up!

Stanley T @ Tamaki Primary School: The house: One day this man was the last person standing he . Went to this hunted Scary house it had dead people Under . The house he didn't know...

Maria @ Tamaki Primary School: haunted story

Oh my goodness Maria, your writing has improved so much! I love how you have used so many powerful words like grumpy wolves, clambered up the tree, charging, so frightened, deep dark forrest, humungous. Amazing! It makes your writing so interesting!



Maria @ Tamaki Primary School: haunted story: Once upon a time there was a man called BoB he was THE only person brave then he went with his car to THE deep dark forest that had grampy w...

Isaia @ Tamaki Primary School: walking to school.

"Isaia you have been trying to hard to improve your writing and it really shows here! You have used dialogue, capital letters and full stops, tried to use a paragraph space and you have lots of powerful words. Well done!


Next time when you type up your story, please make sure to leave spaces between your full stop and your next word. 

Miss Ashley"



Isaia @ Tamaki Primary School: walking to school.: One  glorious morning a family That Lived by  a bridge. The bridge is huge and humongous Also it's the biggest  bridge in the world....

Celebrating Eid!

Today was Eid, a Muslim celebration which marks the end of Ramadan. It is celebrated by visiting and spending time with family and friends, sharing a feast together, buying and wearing fine new clothes and giving gifts to others. In room 6, we made the whole day about Eid. 

To begin our day, we discussed with the class how we celebrated everyones culture through the various language weeks (Maori language week, Tongan language week, etc), but that one culture from our class didn't have a language week, and thats not fair that we didn't celebrate theirs! We celebrated Eid to make sure we acknowledged and celebrated Mojtaba's culture. His family is the only family in our school (at the moment) who are from Afghanistan.

We had several aspects to our day 

-We learnt a song that explains how Eid is celebrated

-We learnt how to say 'Eid Mubarak' and greet people properly

-Decorated cookies that we could then give to people

-Made cards to wish people a happy Eid day

-Ate Sheer Pudding

We were so keen to try out the new Afghani food, with some then practising how to be polite about not liking it (haha!). We loved the idea of giving a card and cookie to somebody to wish them Eid Mubarak! The boys even spent the day looking after Mojtaba's two younger brothers who came to celebrate with us.

It was a great day all around. Our teachers were so proud of the kids and how enthusiastic we were to learn about the Afghani culture and gives things a go!

Tongan Language Week at TPS

We celebrated Tongan language week at school today. A good percentage of our students are Tongan. Miss Aireen and her crew were busy making all preparations for the cultural show. A big Thank you to Miss Aireen for making every assembly a brilliant success.

Mrs. Tafea and her team of parents had spent all night preparing for the dresses and food for the Tongan language week celebration.

Student have been preparing for their items for the last few weeks. A huge thank you to Mrs. Tafea for all her input. You are such a valuable member of our school. It was just awesome to hear students speak in their mother tongue. Our Principal Mrs. Kelly said that our mother tongue is the most precious gift that our parents give us and we should cherish it.

It was a great celebration full of colour and vibrance! We enjoyed every bit of it!

What does a spleen do?

Mrs. Sinclaire asked us what a spleen does?
Isaia from Room 6 was the first to find out it's function. Here it is!

Greeting Ruapotaka!

For today, Thursday and Friday we are hosting the students and teachers from Ruapotaka school. Their school is being cleaned because they found asbestos in the roof. 

They will be using our library, hall and two classrooms while they are here.

So we had a little powhiri this morning to greet them.

Science Week - Our human body video!

To finish off our human body week, we made a video to teach other people about the organs we learnt about. 

Check it out!

Room 6 worked very hard throughout the week to learn about all the organs in the body and some of the systems as well. All the kids loved making their models and can't wait to take them home and use them to teach our families!

Please leave us a comment below and tell us if you learnt anything about your own body from us!

Swimming at Tamaki

In week 7 and 8 of Term 3 we will be going everyday to the Panmure pools for swimming. The teachers at the pools are very friendly. We were put into groups and we learnt different things. One of the groups learnt how to glide and kick in stream line. The other group learnt to be in ballerina pose and keep our legs straight. The instructor taught us to keep our chin up when we are floating backwards.

Science Week - HUMAN BODY! (Thursday!)

Today we really focused on trying to create our models of the body. 

The end goal was to have something that kinda looks like this - 

Each organ has a 'flap' underneath it for students to write the function of each organ. 

For example - 

In the planning, this meant that each kid needed each organ, twice (essentially). This was a bit of a nightmare as it meant A LOT of paper, A LOT of cutting, A LOT of laminating, A LOT of rubbish covering the classroom floor. 

But, we did it! 

Here are two kids with Miss Ashley showing off one finished body, as well as the app Anatomy 4D we used to look at the heart in detail. We posed for this photo for Paula (the lady who recommended the app, so she could go and share what we had done with her peers - go us!)

These two photos are screenshots from a video, hence the questionable quality, but they show the kind of 'flap' notion. The organs are layered in the order they are anatomically - ribcage protecting lungs, heart inside of that, pancreas and liver sort of in front of stomach/kidneys, bladder underneath intestines, etc. So for Falakika (above) to show the lungs to talk about them, she had to move the ribcage out the way! Hiria (below) had to lift the skull to show off the brain.

It was so weird for it to be normal to call across the class things like "have you written on your organs yet?", "who has a spare kidney?", "if you have finished cutting up your body parts come here please", "you need three lungs!", "have you got your brain with you?" etc etc.  So weird, but at the same time, so awesome that the kids were on board and knew exactly what I was talking about all the time. 

It was a VEEEEEEEERRRY stressful day, but, we got there in the end!