Tuesday, 20 September 2016

Lopiseni @ Tamaki Primary School: zombies

Lopi, I know you wrote them in your book - where are your full stops and punctuation? 
I LOVE the problem you have put into this story - actually, there are lots of little problem! When I read it makes me think 'oh whats going to happen' and I feel excited to keep reading. Well done Lopi! Your writing has improved sooo much in the past few weeks!

Lopiseni @ Tamaki Primary School: zombies: jack was going through the wood these zombies came for jack was the only one lifted so the zombies found jack and jack ran to the other s...

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