Wednesday, 21 September 2016

Saia @ Tamaki Primary School: The wedding.

You have started off well using powerful words and details - 'one glorious day the sun was rising and it was beautiful'. Great! You have tried to add dialogue and use speech marks (I can help you put these in the right place)



Saia @ Tamaki Primary School: The wedding.: One glorious day the sun was rising  it was beautiful.  There was a lady who was beautiful she was ging to a wedding. when the wedding was s...

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