You have started off well using powerful words and details - 'one glorious day the sun was rising and it was beautiful'. Great! You have tried to add dialogue and use speech marks (I can help you put these in the right place)
Saia @ Tamaki Primary School: The wedding.: One glorious day the sun was rising it was beautiful. There was a lady who was beautiful she was ging to a wedding. when the wedding was s...
We are Year 3 and 4 students at Tamaki Primary School, a Manaiakalani school in Auckland and our teachers are Miss Ashley and Mrs Sharma.
i like your writing it was a amzing
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ReplyDeleteI really like your stories they were beautiful
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