"HELP, HELP, I'M GETTING CHASED BY SOME WOLVES"
This part is the first part I looked at when I came to your blog. What a great way to get your reader hooked into your story!
You just keep getting better - using dialogue and speech marks, adding detail and powerful words!
Next steps - where are your paragraphs? (I'm sure you had these in your book, remember them to type them in)
Hope L @ Tamaki Primary School: a scary spooky forest: once there was a man in the forest and his name was jack and he was there by himself and on the other side of the forest there was another ...