Aw, what a fairytale ending - and they lived happily ever after!
Yus! You have got a simile, you have got dialogue, you have added detail and some powerful words. Awesome!
Next steps - where are your paragraphs? (I'm sure you did this in your book! Make sure you type these in!)
Hope L @ Tamaki Primary School: a wedding day: Once there was a lady who was getting married so she put on ha dress as soft as a marshmallow then she put on her shoes but her husband ...