Great story Lopiseni! You have got a clear problem and solution. I love that you have included some dialogue, you have got two - one time she says "I've got to catch my breathe" and the other one she thought to herself "I should go and marry him". Great!
Next steps - add more detail and description about your character. Who was she? Does she have a name? Where was the honeymoon? Why did she lie and run away (Did she not love the man?)? What does she look like? What is she wearing?
Next steps - come and see me about your speech marks and I'll help you put them in the right place
Keep it up Lopi!
Lopiseni @ Tamaki Primary School: honey moon: the lady went on a honeymoon and she said i got to catch my breathe and so she layered and ran a away in the forest and she got lost she wa...